I wake up and everything is silent.
Did I have any quiet dreams?
Was everything violent?
Through my bathroom door I see light's beams.

My bed creaks when I move my weight,
white sheets fall to the floor,
when I go through the bathroom's door,
my mind runs a furious debate.

Should I stay or should I go,
when my eyes catch a soft glow.
I approach my full length mirror,
and my reflection should become clearer.

At first nothing occurred,
it's as if my vision suddenly blurred.
Pupils dilated,
with bated breath I waited.

I put my hand on the smooth black matted wood,
when my reflection blinked,
I know I wasn't responsible for that
perhaps blurriness and spooky reflection were linked?

There's a soft glow around my reflection
that surrounds me like a crown,
and with a warm affection
I notice that it's deep brown.

'You value hearth and home the most,'
My doppelgänger speaks,
'But even with outdoors you're very close.'
At this observation red colors my cheeks.

'You are reliable and endure more than the rest,
with simplicity and green thumb you're truly blessed.
People should come to you if they seek comfort and stability,
you won't turn them away due to your dependability.'

'You are meant for great things, never forget,
but beware of a great threat-'
'What?' I yell, 'Continue!', I plea,
but where once was deep brown, now there's nothing to see.

What happened I wonder,
was it only a dream?
There's a strike of the thunder,
and a sweet bed waiting for me.

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Ratings and Comments

#1Leonie Hauri's AvatarLeonie Hauri (rated this 8)

I liked it, overall. Part of this rating may be because of my personal preference, for I have never been a fan of rhyming poems. I do like the way you describe what brown means to you and how it respresents you.

#2Michelle Erickson's AvatarMichelle Erickson (rated this 10)

Beautiful. Honestly, I wouldn't have thought twice had I read this in a book or magazine.

#3Hanna Inari's AvatarHanna Inari (rated this 9)

From the middle of the poem I started reading this in the voice of Zecora from MLP. :D (if you don't know who's that, just forget it) This is a really good poem, though the rhythm and rhyme are sometimes confusing because they change so much. But I like experimental poetry, so yay!

#4February Fortescue's AvatarFebruary Fortescue (rated this 10)

I enjoyed your poem and can tell you put a lot of thought and time into it. I enjoyed the rhyming and also what the color represents to you.

#5Bianca Delacroix's AvatarBianca Delacroix (rated this 8)

I can envision the scene as it unfolds, I appreciate being guided through with your words.
My only complaint is that theme of color did not hold more sway over your story, and that it was not a more descriptive term for the color of brown.
Other than that, it was very well done, cheers!