I was incredibility excited to be having Christmas dinner with a real family, adding to my enthusiasm of course was the fact I would be in a true wizarding household. Dinner was amazing, loads of food, tons of talk… just what I always wanted to be apart of. After dinner Mr. Weasley had us clean-up the table (I do wonder why he didn't just use magic, but I decided not to say anything). It was after this clean-up that Ron and I noticed a strange smell, I thought at first it was chocolate, no maybe vanilla, that's when Ron pointed out how it can't smell like chocolate and vanilla at the same time. Laughing together we ignored the smell and went on to play a little wizard chess.

After about an hour later Charlie and Bill were packing there things up and prepared to leave. Mr. and Mrs. Weasley were chatting good-byes just as Ron was moving his knight to take my bishop (or rather destroy my bishop) when a white, almost light pink colored fog rolled up the left wall that was facing me and vanished before I could even tell Ron. All I could think about was that this is a wizarding house, I'm sure strange things like this happen all the time, it is normal... right? So I lost five games in a row which did seem to make Ron happy but I couldn't stop thinking about the smells, and the fog, but still chose not to say anything, I didn't want to seem like I was unfamiliar with the new world around me. Just then I heard an odd sound playing in my ear. At first I couldn't make out the noise.

It sounded light-hearted, but kind of slow and steady at the same time. I asked Ron if he was hearing any unusual sounds which of course he was not, however, he was looking at me like I was growing an extra arm, or leg. All I could think about was it was a good thing I did not ask him about the fog… he really would have thought I had lost it. Of course I am starting to feel like I'm losing something just not sure what. I decided to change the subject quickly to something else... quidditch. "So, um Ron can you hear the sounds of the huge crowd that will cheer for us once we go to professional quidditch."

"Yeah sure Harry all the time, hey we could go practice now!" This idea was great so I told Ron I would meet him as soon as I got my jacket, Mrs. Weasley had sewn a large H on the back, I figured I should wear it. As soon as I had walked one step out of the door a large green shadow came to light not five paces in front of me. I couldn't make out a face, but I could tell that it was a man coming to form and reaching out to grab my jacket. He had closed his fist around bottom edge when Ron came running out of nowhere and literally tackled me forcing me and him to fall back into the burrow.

I was able to kick the door over with my foot, but could not close it while Ron was screaming for Mr. Weasley. Mrs. Weasley came running in first only to find Ron laying on top of me shouting and the door slightly opened. The figure that had grabbed me vanished. Mr. Weasley quickly called for Dumbledore who appeared not 30 seconds later. As Ron and I recounted what had happened, Dumbledore had only nodded and began asking questions of any other usual events that may have happened. I felt a strong sense to tell him about the strange smell, the rolling fog, and the mysterious sounds I had encountered just early in the evening.

Mrs. Weasley gasped and cried out "Oh Harry, why didn't you say something, oh my, oh my" "Calm down, I'm sure Harry is fine" Dumbledore said, he continued with "No harm will come to Harry in this Burrow I am assured now more then ever." What was he thinking, no harm, I was attacked only one foot outside the door. Dumbledore finished by saying "You see Harry, I suspect you had been doused with the heartless curse…. Which of course would take your ability to love, therefore leaving you open to attacks of a most hateful nature forcing you to be heartless yourself while also taking a defense mechanism away, that is why you smelled sweet smells, saw light fog, and could hear a tender tone... It was love leaving you... Harry.

"But Professor what can I do now, how do I get it back." "Harry, you must understand that it indeed did not leave you... not completely, you see you are very much loved in this house although you may not see it now, the Weasley truly do love you... otherwise whatever was after you would have been able to come in." After much more discussion I finally understood even if I was not related by blood, Mr. and Mrs. Weasley still considered me a son. I only wish he would have given me a better explanation of who would have played such a cruel prank... It had to be a prank... right?

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#1Rose Hanson's AvatarRose Hanson (rated this 8)

I like it! Although there were a few run-on sentences, and there should be a question-mark instead of a period in some places. Also remember to break a new line everyime someone new talks(dialogue). Your spelling was fantastic.

#2Fiona Rastomony's AvatarFiona Rastomony (rated this 8)

#3Audrey Lamantia's AvatarAudrey Lamantia (rated this 3)

#4Catriona Watson's AvatarCatriona Watson (rated this 6)

#5Lyssa Hosler's AvatarLyssa Hosler (rated this 10)

This is a excellant story and I enjoyed it a lot.

#6Raphaela Guoan's AvatarRaphaela Guoan (rated this 9)

This was a very good short story, but there were a few spelling mistakes and grammar errors. Overall, a very well-written piece! ;)

#7Askeron Kyle's AvatarAskeron Kyle (rated this 7)

#8Crystal Clementine's AvatarCrystal Clementine (rated this 9)

very creative story I like it. (:

#9Silvia Chang's AvatarSilvia Chang (rated this 8)


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#11Renee Kaiser's AvatarRenee Kaiser (rated this 4)

#12Ireth Halliwell's AvatarIreth Halliwell (rated this 8)

Wow.. it's really nice. The whole idea of losing love, that is just so sweet. I really like the whole story and act. But, anyway, I think you still need to fix some punctuations back there. ^^ But, great job!

#13Lera Kamerat's AvatarLera Kamerat (rated this 10)

When I read this story I felt like I was in it.

#14Iselilja Mira Mickelsdottir's AvatarIselilja Mira Mickelsdottir (rated this 5)

#15Sandra Bloomwicks's AvatarSandra Bloomwicks (rated this 7)

Interesting start to a full fic. I wish I could make Dumbledore appear that fast anytime I got into scary situations, alas, I'm not Harry.

#16Plixen Kahne's AvatarPlixen Kahne (rated this 5)

#17Prof. Tambaqui Balthazar's AvatarProf. Tambaqui Balthazar (rated this 7)

Its ok, but the end part of the story seems rushed.

#18Prof. Ben Quaddler's AvatarProf. Ben Quaddler (rated this 8)

Not too sure about the whole heartless curse angle, but quite well written, so credit for that.

#19Meara OBannon's AvatarMeara OBannon (rated this 6)

#20Krystal Jester's AvatarKrystal Jester (rated this 7)

I thought this story was quite good. Very nice transition from a normal dinner to chaos. I also liked the open ended ending....I love a story that makes me wonder what could/might have happened.

#21Desiree LeFay's AvatarDesiree LeFay (rated this 7)

#22Mackenzie Krey's AvatarMackenzie Krey (rated this 8)

I thought it was really good. I like the plot a lot and I'm also glad that Harry knows that people really care about him.

#23Prof. Iruel Riddle's AvatarProf. Iruel Riddle (rated this 7)

#24Debora Lovelace's AvatarDebora Lovelace (rated this 4)

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#27Olive Snitzberry's AvatarOlive Snitzberry (rated this 8)

Very good and I think it truly was a strange happening!

#28Kath Snape's AvatarKath Snape (rated this 8)

Fantastic!!! Look out JKR!!!

#29Melody Greenspell's AvatarMelody Greenspell (rated this 9)

#30Allison Prencer's AvatarAllison Prencer (rated this 7)

Very creative idea.I really enjoyed it :D

#31Serenity Thomas's AvatarSerenity Thomas (rated this 9)

I really did enjoy your story. The ending was a complete surprise that I never saw coming. Great Job!

#32Dormiens Nunquam's AvatarDormiens Nunquam (rated this 7)

#33Phedre Montreve's AvatarPhedre Montreve (rated this 9)

#34Chloe Fairchilde's AvatarChloe Fairchilde (rated this 5)

Kind of odd. Interesting idea, but rather dryly written. Could use more showing and less telling.

#35Julia Weflynn's AvatarJulia Weflynn (rated this 7)

#36Amber Woodlock's AvatarAmber Woodlock (rated this 8)

Excellent idea's but I think it could have done with a little bit more of an explantion. Nice Cliff hanger though :)

#37Ani Snape's AvatarAni Snape (rated this 6)

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#39Nikki Walker's AvatarNikki Walker (rated this 7)

#40Saeir Darr's AvatarSaeir Darr (rated this 8)

hehehe Dumbledore, not bad!

#41June Whitefield's AvatarJune Whitefield (rated this 8)

#42Alinda Locke's AvatarAlinda Locke (rated this 8)

#43Zuvona Miska's AvatarZuvona Miska (rated this 8)

I love it. It is a very interesting concept and a brillant idea. Keep up the good work.

#44Sevelyn Snape's AvatarSevelyn Snape (rated this 8)

wow....very interesting. It is very unique and i would actualli like to know what happens next. Perhaps you should turn it into a fanfic. It really is cool. A bit strange i'll admit....but......

#45Stella Noge's AvatarStella Noge (rated this 6)

Good story.

#46Aili Raja's AvatarAili Raja (rated this 5)

Good idea but could have been written better, explained a little bit better - like why did Harry feel these things when love was leaving him.

#47Justin Andujar's AvatarJustin Andujar (rated this 9)

Very GOOD!

#48Krisi Mwahz's AvatarKrisi Mwahz (rated this 8)

#49Lillian Wotters's AvatarLillian Wotters (rated this 4)

MMmmmmm.......I dun get it...

#50Molly Grabau's AvatarMolly Grabau (rated this 7)

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#54Alexia Riaper's AvatarAlexia Riaper (rated this 8)

#55Emmy Rose Sanders's AvatarEmmy Rose Sanders (rated this 8)

Very very creative!!!! Keep up the good work!!!

#56Jessica Summers's AvatarJessica Summers (rated this 9)

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#65Molly Pegg's AvatarMolly Pegg (rated this 8)

very nice :)

#66Adelline Aldridge's AvatarAdelline Aldridge (rated this 7)

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#72Prof. Esmerelda Knotwise's AvatarProf. Esmerelda Knotwise (rated this 5)

Needs to be edited for spelling, grammar, and punctuation.

#73Orphen Eyeless Cain's AvatarOrphen Eyeless Cain (rated this 4)

#74Persephone Shadows's AvatarPersephone Shadows (rated this 7)

Wow...what a sad and enigmatic twist to a Christmas Eve story...I'm curious to see how Christmas was going to play out in this situation.

#75Prof. Ceit Uiseag's AvatarProf. Ceit Uiseag (rated this 4)

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#82Gabrielle Lupin's AvatarGabrielle Lupin (rated this 8)

Very Nice!

#83Prof. Olivia Rictusempra's AvatarProf. Olivia Rictusempra (rated this 6)

Good story :)

#84Rocky Rinato's AvatarRocky Rinato (rated this 5)

#85Gypsy Ardor's AvatarGypsy Ardor (rated this 5)

Very loving. :-)

#86Severus McGonagall's AvatarSeverus McGonagall (rated this 5)

Not bad. :)

#87Maya Winters's AvatarMaya Winters (rated this 5)

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#91Nassa Dikaios's AvatarNassa Dikaios (rated this 4)

#92Lalaith Lomion's AvatarLalaith Lomion (rated this 3)

The story is a bit confusing. Then it was required to do a story in first person, so where the writer is the protagonist. And the writer is not Harry.

#93Zia Stonebury's AvatarZia Stonebury (rated this 6)

It was supposed to be about you-a first year, not Harry Potter. Nice plot, though.

#94Holly Molly's AvatarHolly Molly (rated this 8)

It was a little to long and I didn't see where it was going at first.

#95Prof. Ebba Brighton's AvatarProf. Ebba Brighton (rated this 8)

Excellent use of diction and a very entertaining read. =)

#96Ashley Forog's AvatarAshley Forog (rated this 8)

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#98Lydia Ellis's AvatarLydia Ellis (rated this 10)

An amazingly deatailed story with exciting and well formed plot. A good and original storyline. Well done, excellent work!

#99Meg London's AvatarMeg London (rated this 3)

#100Ayahzy Nahki's AvatarAyahzy Nahki (rated this 7)

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#102Alexis Granger's AvatarAlexis Granger (rated this 7)

it was an very good narrative story i love the way they descibed the smells,fog,and the hand reaching i think this puts an affect on short storys!

#103Sycyla Rose's AvatarSycyla Rose (rated this 6)

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#111Felix Felicius's AvatarFelix Felicius (rated this 9)

Gret job, just a few tiny grammatical errors. :)

#112Prof. Ulol Kimil's AvatarProf. Ulol Kimil (rated this 3)

Interesting story but not very Christmas related.