...."I can't do magic" I whispered.
My mother, the most talented Transfiguration professor Hogwarts had ever seen since the late Professor McGonagall, just looked me in the eyes, and smiled.
"I know honey. You are my daughter, I suspected from the day you were born, and I have known for a while, but you will never be less of a witch to me", she declared.
I sat staring at her, face pale and eyes brimming with tears above my stone cold cup of tea.
My mother was the most important person to me, and I had been so ashamed and so afraid she would think less of me.
"Thanks Mum. I just didn’t know what I would do without you", I said with hope in my heart.
"It’s okay. I'm always here for you. I will even help you let the family know when you are ready".
This came as a relief to my ears. It was the hardest thing I had ever done, admitting to my mother that magic wasn’t in me. I didn’t think I could tell my extended family by myself. At least I had reached this hurdle alone.
As I sat thinking, contemplating my future, thankfully with my mother at my side, I felt a hand brush mine.
"We will always be family, always", she whispered, with tears in her own eyes.

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Ratings and Comments

#1St.John Aloisius Sloots's AvatarSt.John Aloisius Sloots (rated this 8)

This is indeed short but above minimums so “huzzah!” to you. You economically packed a lot of emotion into a small space without being overly dramatic and turning the scene into a cry-fest. Well done! This meant, however, that you chose to be somewhat sparse in the details which left me a bit dissatisfied. For example, according to the prompt you were to confess to “…wizarding friends and…” [describe] “…how they took it.” While I could easily imagine ‘mom’ filling the role of a best friend, as she eventually was to most of us, I did wonder how the protagonist’s friends reacted. There are a few mechanical errors (commas and periods go inside quotation marks etc.), but overall they do not detract from the story of your piece.

#2Catriona Watson's AvatarCatriona Watson (rated this 8)

This story is too short and too emotional.

*sniff sniff.

So sad but I like the ending. Good story. Well done!

#3Mikhail Suracuse's AvatarMikhail Suracuse (rated this 7)

This story has a lot of emotion in it, for one so short. But, it's very descriptive and well written. I don't think I would have the heart to tell my mother if I was a Squib, especially if she was as great as Professor McGonagall. Great job!

#4Figaro Black's AvatarFigaro Black (rated this 9)

Pretty good, you're quite descriptive. It feels repititive as everybody else is saying it but, it's packed with emotion!

#5Nodoka Phoenix's AvatarNodoka Phoenix (rated this 9)

Quite short, but very well written. A lot of emotion packed into few words. I liked it a lot. Very interesting though that your mother suspected since birth, I thought that it was something not normally noticed until about the age of 6 or 7

#6Magyk Flyte 's AvatarMagyk Flyte (rated this 8)

A very caring story. Short but lots of detail!
Well done!

#7Malström Lychgate's AvatarMalström Lychgate (rated this 10)

A very sad short story, it pulls on the heart strings. A mother like that is a treasure.

#8Ophelia Cromwell's AvatarOphelia Cromwell (rated this 8)

Although this story is short, you've packed it with so much emotion and I love it. It's very descriptive and I especially love the line "...face pale and eyes brimming with tears above my stone cold cup of tea." You captured pretty much perfectly how this moment in a Squib's life might occur. The only reason your mark isn't a 9 or 10 is because, although it is touching, it's a bit too touching to remain entirely sincere. Other than that, great job!

#9Octavia Meetingale's AvatarOctavia Meetingale (rated this 9)

Short story massive emotion, I agree with Abbi Warnock-"Great oppening sentence!"
Fantastic writing.

#10Bere Lee's AvatarBere Lee (rated this 9)

nice story, short but touching. I like the way you wrote and how you told it :)

#11Rose Alstien's AvatarRose Alstien (rated this 10)

short sweet, sad, and to the point. I like it. awww! *sniffs* I love the "you will never be less than a witch to me" line.

#12Jenzi Darkstone's AvatarJenzi Darkstone (rated this 9)

A sad story but very touching. It was a nice read, you were descriptive and well worded. Very nice.

#13Abbi Warnock's AvatarAbbi Warnock (rated this 10)

A very touching story!! I could almost cry reading it! You used great support sentences and a extremely great opening sentence!

#14Maria Stewart's AvatarMaria Stewart (rated this 9)

very touching!
I really liked it!ç
Good job!! :)

#15Lera Kamerat's AvatarLera Kamerat (rated this 9)

such a touching story! But you are luck to have a mom like yours.

#16Amanda P. X. Sim's AvatarAmanda P. X. Sim (rated this 7)

That's rather sad... but you're really lucky to have such a loving and supportive mother. With your mum, you don't have to worry about being a squib as much as others do, for you have her everlasting love...

#17Scarlet Leslie's AvatarScarlet Leslie (rated this 8)

Aww, that is such a touching scene. You use some great analogies.

#18Ryan Granger's AvatarRyan Granger (rated this 8)

Good! I thought I saw some grammar errors but you really did good with the line, "face pale and eyes brimming with tears above my stone cold cup of tea" Its very attention catching.

#19Kristen McKenna's AvatarKristen McKenna (rated this 8)

Very touching! Awhh...*wipes tears away*
Very good job, I love it.
Maybe a little corny, but hey, it's a story,right?

#20Ardeliah Longbottom's AvatarArdeliah Longbottom (rated this 9)

What a touching moment you have preserved here.

#21Ely Granger's AvatarEly Granger (rated this 8)

I really like your story. Family is the most important thing in the world.

#22Andrea Caroline's AvatarAndrea Caroline (rated this 8)

I love the concept that family bond is stronger than the need to be a wizard/witch.

#23Lindsey Hyde-Phoenix's AvatarLindsey Hyde-Phoenix (rated this 7)

Overall I thought it was kinda corny.. not bad at all, but a little too sweet. I was going to rate it a 5. But this phrase did it for me:

"eyes brimming with tears above my stone cold cup of tea"

Stone cold cup of tea! I love it. So a 7 it is. :)

#24Alek Natan's AvatarAlek Natan (rated this 9)

Your mother lies. She probably will hex you while you sleep. Oh sorry, I just went into story too much. I think, Hermione, her family will hex her on sight. Oh sorry, I went into story again.

#25Hermione Hazel's AvatarHermione Hazel (rated this 9)

Wow...short....but very nice! Very heart-touching...I wonder what happened when they told the whole family?