Harry smiled as he walked in to kings cross station, Ginny at his side, his 2 children leaping in front talking excitedly about school.
“You can’t imagine the punishments, they’re terrible,” James was elaborating loudly to a nervous looking lily.
“Ignore your brother,” harry laughed, “they won’t punish you, don’t worry, and they’re not too bad anyway.”
He scanned the crowd, searching for familiar faces, and a grin broke across his face.
"Look Ginny, there's your brother."
"Oh Ron, Ron over here," Ginny called waving.
Ron and Hermione walked quickly towards them, there son Fred running ahead, calling to James. Muggles were grumbling at him but he didn’t care, it was September, and time for school again. Hermione was holding the hand of a small, angry looking girl.
"I want to go, I want to go," molly said in frustration.
"Soon, very soon, just a few more years," Hermione soothed.
“It’ll be ages, I’m only 9, 2 more years, I can’t stand it, and I want to learn magic so bad.”
“That’s not too long, and look lily’s here.”
At the mention of her friend molly brightened up immediately and skipped forward.
James, harry's oldest son ran forward to talk to Fred, whilst Lily looked shyly at him, harry smiled to himself, hoping that James would look after lily at school; she would be a first year this year.
"So how is everything, it was such a shame I couldn't come to the world cup with you this year, but Ron told me all about it," Hermione greeted harry and Ginny.
"Oh I expect he did," harry said laughing, for Ron’s excitement over the world cup hadn't changed.
"Yes, I missed you, hopefully you'll be able to come to see us some time," Ginny said to Hermione.
"Oh, that would be really good, I’d enjoy that, and I’m sure Fred and molly would too."
"Talking of our kids the train will be here soon, we don’t want to miss it do we," Ron grinned at harry who laughed, remembering his second year at school, when he and Ron couldn’t get on to the train.
They all rushed forward towards the barrier between platforms 9 and 10, and easily their bodies went through it. In front of them was the Hogwarts express, puffing out smoke waiting on the platform.
“Oh look it’s the train, look! Molly squealed happily pointing at it.
Fred and James started to run towards it still talking loudly, looking through the windows of the train to find their friends.
"James, take your sister with you," Ginny called.
James waved to his sister who ran happily towards him. Fred pulled open the door of the train and the 3 children got on, with harry, Ginny, Ron, Hermione and molly watching them.
"Have a good time," the parents called.
“Remember to get in to Gryffindor,” harry called to lily.
“Yes I will do, that shouldn’t be too hard really,” she smiled and disappeared from site.
The train started to move away, and molly ran along the platform waving.
"Write to me," molly yelled at her brother who smiled, popping his head through the window and said, "I will, of course I will."

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Ratings and Comments

#1Castora Grimsby's AvatarCastora Grimsby (rated this 6)

A very good effort. Keep it up.

#2Faye Roderick's AvatarFaye Roderick (rated this 6)

Looks like a hurried writing. It'll look nicer if you had put it in better format, and checking all the punctuation. Kinda bothers me that names aren't capitalized.

#3Cam Yousefpour's AvatarCam Yousefpour (rated this 3)

good try, but do try to improve grammar, spelling. Also, this seems alot like the original

#4Abbie Maldonado's AvatarAbbie Maldonado (rated this 4)

It was a good effort, but too much like the original.

#5Nichole McMellan's AvatarNichole McMellan (rated this 5)

I thought it was good, I liked it, the only thing is do brothers and sisters get along like that? lol nice job! :P

#6Brenna Westfeld's AvatarBrenna Westfeld (rated this 5)

Good effort. I enjoyed the story, but the grammar/spelling and formatting were a little hard on the eyes. I really enjoyed little Molly's character!

#7Kiri Galdor's AvatarKiri Galdor (rated this 6)

Good content.

#8Zuvona Miska's AvatarZuvona Miska (rated this 6)

Great effort and nice job.

#9Megaera Selwyn's AvatarMegaera Selwyn (rated this 5)

I would have rated it higher if it had been edited for proper grammar/spelling/etc. :)

#10Lilian Carter's AvatarLilian Carter (rated this 5)

It was a good ending but you should try to write out the numbers. Also make sure you capitalize all the names.

#11Mia Vardales's AvatarMia Vardales (rated this 3)

There are lot of grammar mistakes that flaw the story to the point of making it annoying to read. Also, it isn't very different from the original epilogue. Sorry.

#12Prof. Ulol Kimil's AvatarProf. Ulol Kimil (rated this 6)

It was a good effort, but it would be a good idea to check twice for grammar and such.

#13Prof. Opal Dragonfly's AvatarProf. Opal Dragonfly (rated this 4)

This would be "average" if not for the amount of grammar and punctuation errors, etc.

#14Lilly Stargazer's AvatarLilly Stargazer (rated this 5)

#15Rosanna Gullveig's AvatarRosanna Gullveig (rated this 4)

Spelling and grammar issues made me rate this lower than the actual story probably deserves... but the mistakes really did diminish my enjoyment of the story.

#16Elyranna Reginhart's AvatarElyranna Reginhart (rated this 5)

This is quite similar to the real one, but nice effort.

#17Nikki Walker's AvatarNikki Walker (rated this 4)

#18Annabelle Pollifax's AvatarAnnabelle Pollifax (rated this 6)

#19Amber Woodlock's AvatarAmber Woodlock (rated this 8)

I enjoyed this but didn't think it was really that much different from the actual ending, but I liked the origional ending anyway :)

#20Serenity Thomas's AvatarSerenity Thomas (rated this 6)

Good effort!

#21Mason Willow's AvatarMason Willow (rated this 5)

#22Noemi Skywell's AvatarNoemi Skywell (rated this 6)

#23Leftie Louis's AvatarLeftie Louis (rated this 10)

It was amazing!

#24Ellie Warhol's AvatarEllie Warhol (rated this 4)

I found it was much to simialr to the one in the Harry Potter books. Also I don't think Harry would tell Lilly to make sure to get into gryffendor.

#25Marie Dark's AvatarMarie Dark (rated this 6)

Maybe a little more change might be effective. But all in all, I liked it.

#26Sophia Lay's AvatarSophia Lay (rated this 5)

#27Jacqualine Snape's AvatarJacqualine Snape (rated this 7)

Nice effort, keep trying.

#28Pilar Greene's AvatarPilar Greene (rated this 5)

#29Julie Garnet's AvatarJulie Garnet (rated this 6)

#30Alinda Locke's AvatarAlinda Locke (rated this 4)

#31Anastasia Wade's AvatarAnastasia Wade (rated this 5)

#32Loredana Danae's AvatarLoredana Danae (rated this 6)

#33Bere Lee's AvatarBere Lee (rated this 7)

nice

#34Ivorie Windton's AvatarIvorie Windton (rated this 5)

You did a good job, the only thing was that the grammer was little off and the story seemed very simular to the one in the book, just a little different, I guess I want a little change.

#35William Tharp's AvatarWilliam Tharp (rated this 7)

#36Eve Shay's AvatarEve Shay (rated this 6)

#37Anastasia Huang's AvatarAnastasia Huang (rated this 3)

It seemed a bit almost like deja vu... a bit similar of the one that JK Rowling wrote. But the grammer/formatting was a bit irksome, and the non-capitals kinda bothered me. But still, I liked the feeling behind it. :)

#38Annette Picolt's AvatarAnnette Picolt (rated this 7)

This is pretty good! Nice work.

#39Okta Zhang's AvatarOkta Zhang (rated this 7)

I like this story.

#40Bytes Phoenix's AvatarBytes Phoenix (rated this 7)

#41Leonard Burgoroth's AvatarLeonard Burgoroth (rated this 6)

It's shorter than the original but good try. I like how you omitted the Malfoys from this. They won't have prejudice against trying to make friends with Scorpius at Hogwarts.

#42Askeron Kyle's AvatarAskeron Kyle (rated this 7)

I liked it.

#43Neville Prongs's AvatarNeville Prongs (rated this 6)

#44Setephani White's AvatarSetephani White (rated this 6)

I think this story is not bad

#45Nina Gav's AvatarNina Gav (rated this 6)

good

#46Ardeliah Longbottom's AvatarArdeliah Longbottom (rated this 4)

It is a nice bit of writing, with a few technical errors like capitalization and such. But it did seem very familiar to me, a bit more like a re hash of the original one.

#47Esmeralda Snyder's AvatarEsmeralda Snyder (rated this 5)

The one thing that irritated me was the spelling/grammer/punctuation mistakes. Half the time the names don't have a capital letter. If this is just an automatic thing that happens sorry but otherwise could you please try to fix it up?

#48Marguerite Davenport's AvatarMarguerite Davenport (rated this 7)

It was well thought out and had a warm feeling to it. I don't really see much of a change from original. I like that you changed some of the name of the children. But you need to work on Capitalization of proper nouns like Harry. You grammar is off a little; and the formatting could be different. It also seems a little rushed. Nice entry.

#49Lani Nickname's AvatarLani Nickname (rated this 5)

I dont really mind about grammer,cos urrr well im not exactly an expert at grammer but i put low cos well its practicly the same as the origanlal, just a few changes...

#50Thoth Van's AvatarThoth Van (rated this 6)

#51Achip Silvia's AvatarAchip Silvia (rated this 7)

This story was not very different from the book.. but I still like it.. great job..

#52Darik Limewire's AvatarDarik Limewire (rated this 5)

Grammar is a little off but all round good...

#53Yavanna Basham's AvatarYavanna Basham (rated this 7)

#54Amanda Summers's AvatarAmanda Summers (rated this 7)

#55Nicole Finch's AvatarNicole Finch (rated this 5)

It was good but very much like the book. I did like it that you called one of the kids 'Fred' though - nice touch.

#56Isabella Russo's AvatarIsabella Russo (rated this 6)

Off to Hogwarts again. I like Molly running with the train at the end. There are words that should be capitalized. Also with spaces between the paragraphs or tabs at the beginning, it would not looked so smashed together. This was good ending.

#57Kiora Quigley's AvatarKiora Quigley (rated this 5)

Nothing much new in here, but I like the Fred-reference. Others already mentioned the capital letters-problem.

#58Tallula Perry's AvatarTallula Perry (rated this 8)

Not very different from the book, but I liked it.

#59Jenna Hathaway's AvatarJenna Hathaway (rated this 6)

Not too different from the original.. and the format could've been neater I guess.

#60Sarah Matrix's AvatarSarah Matrix (rated this 6)

Not muh of a change - but I still like it. Nice!

#61Jennifer Kwan's AvatarJennifer Kwan (rated this 8)

Good job! I liked it! The idea to the original one is quite the same but as I loved the original one, I love yours as well!

#62Prof. Dom Gaidin's AvatarProf. Dom Gaidin (rated this 4)

Needs some work on the grammatical side of things, capitals for names first and foremost. Other than that, it's ok, but it's too similar to the original Epilogue, just reworded a bit and, well, not as good.

#63Mazey Hughes's AvatarMazey Hughes (rated this 5)

#64Ben Bowtrukle's AvatarBen Bowtrukle (rated this 7)

Quite good, needs some work

#65Alva Saint-Clair's AvatarAlva Saint-Clair (rated this 8)

It's a nice alternative epilogue. Picturing the scene makes me feel all warm inside! ^_^

#66Sophie Delacour's AvatarSophie Delacour (rated this 7)

Good job.

#67Endang Potter's AvatarEndang Potter (rated this 9)

Very Nice

#68Sarah Evans's AvatarSarah Evans (rated this 7)

I liked it.

#69Rorey Padfoot's AvatarRorey Padfoot (rated this 5)

I agree with the others about the capitalized letters in the character's names. Not much different from the book, except the name changes, but overall ok.

#70Ashlee Sully's AvatarAshlee Sully (rated this 8)

Its a good story and it did need some editing. I could say that I didn't like you changing Ron and Hermione's kids names from Rose and Hugo, or saying that Harry only had two kids when he had three but its your version so good job! =)

#71Catriona Watson's AvatarCatriona Watson (rated this 8)

This is very good. It made me imagined the scene and the dialogue is wonderful. Well done.

#72Lera Kamerat's AvatarLera Kamerat (rated this 8)

Good Job!

#73Ashley Alison's AvatarAshley Alison (rated this 7)

I thought that was really good. Not much different from the original, but it was very well written. I enjoyed it.

#74Zoki Phantom's AvatarZoki Phantom (rated this 7)

Mhm, just as Ashley I have the same comment, it needs some editing, other than that, it was okay. :]

#75Ashley Denver's AvatarAshley Denver (rated this 5)

It was good, but it needed some editing. There are names that don't start with capitals. Numbers should be written out instead of using 9 or 2, they should be two or nine. Other then the lack of editing it's good.

#76Angel Phoenix's AvatarAngel Phoenix (rated this 7)

#77Rose Alstien's AvatarRose Alstien (rated this 8)

great job!

#78Luna Jecklewood's AvatarLuna Jecklewood (rated this 7)

Hi its good! Good Job!

#79Nicole Intrieri's AvatarNicole Intrieri (rated this 7)

I liked it a lot(: